Yip! you read the title correctly - sometimes it IS all about me............and right now me needs a little bit of help... Before I ask my question; just a reminder to all you smart alecs out there - ''There's no such thing as a stupid question...'' and so............Is there such a word as 'vantage'? The context of the sentence is....
The midday sun streamed in through the large pane of glass, that went the full length of the café and made an ideal vantage point to watch the world go by.
Feel free to juggle the sentence about to get a more graphic picture - cheers
hi young gaelic lass,
only thing i see in your sentence is that u are at an ADvantage to get the first beer to be served, we are all DISadvantaged in this respect as you have a clear unobstructed view and VANTAGE point over the said bar area as you are not one to frequent cafe's.
Well hello there Mr. Macpherson - I do believe cafes in France serve beer, but as always I stand corrected if anyone dares correct me...............and so is there such a word as 'vantage' and does my sentence make sense?
Tweaked the sentence a tad.............The midday sun streamed in through the large pane of glass which went the full length of the café, this made an ideal vantage point to watch the world go by......just a tad - but I think it reads better.....ANYONE???
yes your sentence is correct and does make sense. look up the word in WIKIPEDIA and you will see a sentence used
in the similar context as your own. BierSuip e154
chris...............
No interest in looking up WIKIPEDIA - I'm in the middle of writing a book you know.....when I'm rich and famous, you guys will say - ''Damn, I knew her when she was a regular Joe soap'' :emot26:
u mean like J.K. RAWLINGS HARRY POTTER books? or IAN FLEMINGS' JAMES BOND?
J.K.Rowlings is childs play and as for James Bond - Hah! I laugh at James Bond - Oh! No my friend, my book is not for the faint hearted - it will grip you totally from start to finish, and scare the beejesus out of ya.......and forever more you will sleep with the lights on!!!
let me just remind you that JAMES BOND IS a true story. Such an active life!!!!!
James Bond is boring............(sorry to any of his fans) - active or not, there's nothing there that makes you sit up and grip a cushion in front of your face, peaking out sporadically and swallowing down a squeal - and hoping against hope that the end will come quickly..............and so you can keep your Jimmy Bond. e154
Hey Rhona
My 2 c is to consider for the reader, the fact that if the midday sun was streaming through the window was it not difficult to look at at the world through it.
who was watching from this vantage point where they inside looking out or outside looking in, where they sitting just as observed by the world as they were observing?
Sitting in the shaded area against the wall, facing the full length window of the cafe, gave ...... the perfect vantage point of observing the scene outside which was bathed in the midday sun, the seating was perfect as .... Huh any help. should I climb back into my cocoon now.
Barb .. you back ?? a long sabbatical from the site ?/
e154
Ta .. good to see you again ..
Barb - you're a genius, thanks a million..........always good to get a second opinion; I'll re-arrange that sentence - you're brilliant
Ha, you should give more description by putting an adjective in fron of the word "cafe'" to give the reader a brief description/idea of the cafe'...
The only way we are gonna "it will grip you totally from start to finish" is if the cover is made outta velcro and we are wearing velcro gloves...... :emot19:
First of all Mikey my boy - this section is ''all about me'' not you - but me..............so before I boot you accross the forum - pray tell what adjetive would you recomend??
Well My Irish friend, were is this cafe of yours situated, Is it french, victorian or cajun? Is it an old building? A seedy joint.... or high establishment...... how much does the coffee cost?
bravo
Never you mind where MY cafe is situated - sufice to say the midday sun streams in through the window. Anyway if you had the privilage of reading my book, you would see the sentence slotted nicely into a very discriptive paragraph...........seedy joint, huh! the cheek of you...
Alright, alright - don't beg..........I'll give you the paragraph in question -
....Jake sometimes found it hard to believe that it was only a few short months since he had slowly pushed the door to the Rocky Rooster café wide open; being the only place in this god forsaken town to get a decent coffee and bite to eat, he found himself doing the same thing everyday at 12.30 and had done so for the last 6 months and 13 days; 14 if you included to-day! He casually walked to his usual table, situated in the shaded area at the end of the dining room and faced the full length window. Jake enjoyed watching people as they went about their busy daily lives and this was the perfect vantage point for observing the scene outside, which was bathed in the midday sun. The seating was perfect and as the sun streamed in through the large pane of glass, the café was heated to boiling point. The constant low hum of the air conditioner was enough to drive anyone insane, but to Jake it was soothing. The cool breeze that escaped from the vent directly above his head casually tousled his hair.
I like it... but rethink this... "the café was heated to boiling point"
Just my two cents worth.....
one of my favourite pics of all time, can stare at it for hours.....
Yeah! I like that picture........easy on the eye.
You're 2 cent is greatly appreciated and that line will be rehashed.........remember this is my first attempt at a book, would you like a paragraph from a different section?
With the utmost respect, I shall decline.... tis' was way past nine, so I bid thee a fond farewell..... as I head of to bed....
gnite
But I will have a paragraph on Friday please..... just a wee bit tired at the moment.....
Tomorrow it is then gnite
It's tomorrow, pray tell, where art thou?
goodmorning
At midday - I be at work my master.............but here goes; from a completely different section of the book, I've decided to treat you to two paragraphs:-
Both the terrifying shrieks and the awful odour penetrated Jakes brain simultaneously and jolted him back to reality, the harsh reality that was now his existence. Every nerve ending in his body was screaming and his head was thumping. Jake instinctively knew he was in trouble.....deep trouble. Far deeper than he could ever imagine in his wildest dreams, or in this case nightmare! He could feel the perspiration trickling down the back of his neck as a cold panic gripped him in the pit of his stomach; he slowly opened his eyes, and instantly wished he hadn't.
The vision that greeted Jake was one that he knew would be embedded in his memory until the day he drew his final breath. Satanic figures groped in the shadows – people from his past that were long dead, had returned to haunt him, shrieking and grabbing at him, reaching out pulling at his clothes and clawing at his flesh. Jake shut his eyes tight and hurriedly tried to move away from the grappling hands, his body held tight like a coiled spring. The sharp pain that tore through his body and the involuntary screech that escaped his constricted throat shot Jake back to reality. With a growing sense of doom he realised that both his wrists and ankles were shackled, chains leading from these shackles to a hollow, hinged neck-ring ensured Jake was going nowhere fast.
Whatcha think, huh? huh? huh? I dare you to tell me that you are not gripped......velcro gloves - hah! you so want to read the rest..........
Quote from: Rhona on May 09, 2008, 05:07:22 PM
At midday - I be at work my master.............but here goes; from a completely different section of the book, I've decided to treat you to two paragraphs:-
Both the terrifying shrieks and the awful odour penetrated Jakes brain simultaneously and jolted him back to reality, the harsh reality that was now his existence. Every nerve ending in his body was screaming and his head was thumping. Jake instinctively knew he was in trouble.....deep trouble. Far deeper than he could ever imagine in his wildest dreams, or in this case nightmare! He could feel the perspiration trickling down the back of his neck as a cold panic gripped him in the pit of his stomach; he slowly opened his eyes, and instantly wished he hadn't.
The vision that greeted Jake was one that he knew would be embedded in his memory until the day he drew his final breath. Satanic figures groped in the shadows – people from his past that were long dead, had returned to haunt him, shrieking and grabbing at him, reaching out pulling at his clothes and clawing at his flesh. Jake shut his eyes tight and hurriedly tried to move away from the grappling hands, his body held tight like a coiled spring. The sharp pain that tore through his body and the involuntary screech that escaped his constricted throat shot Jake back to reality. With a growing sense of doom he realised that both his wrists and ankles were shackled, chains leading from these shackles to a hollow, hinged neck-ring ensured Jake was going nowhere fast.
Whatcha think, huh? huh? huh? I dare you to tell me that you are not gripped......velcro gloves - hah! you so want to read the rest..........
not tonight, still have to get some sleep.
MIKE!!!!! WHERE DID YOU FIND THIS WOMEN
Hey! Hey! Hey! - what's with the insults??? Mike didn't find 'this woman'.......play nice!!!
:emot26:
Do you think he meant to say THIS WOMAN or THESE WOMEN?
He'd better be careful what he says - definately won't be getting the scanner if he is insulting any of the woman on the forum!
Think I'll ban him from Spar as well!
Not to be giving you ideas Michelle, but I know where I'd put the scanner if he called to my door..............
Quote from: Michele Alexander (Voden) on May 09, 2008, 07:12:00 PM
:emot26:
Do you think he meant to say THIS WOMAN or THESE WOMEN?
He'd better be careful what he says - definately won't be getting the scanner if he is insulting any of the woman on the forum!
Think I'll ban him from Spar as well!
giverose
Is that a peace offering Mike?
I still think you should stick that scanner............
Ag shame - he's normally such a nice guy! I'll give him another chance, if he utters anymore insults the scanner is out of bounds!
I'll have to trust you on that one Michelle...........usually he stays quiet or throws the odd insult / quip - but okay, let's give him another chance...........just one though!!!
Don't shoot me, it's just my honest opinion, I ain't a professional either.... but
"Both the terrifying shrieks and the awful odour penetrated Jakes brain simultaneously and jolted him back to reality, the harsh reality that was now his existence"
I don't think it is kosher to use the same punch word, so close together.... and I;m still reading....
bighug
It's honesty I'm after - for me it's the use of the same punch word that makes the sentence hit home........
blah! blah! blah! jolted him back to reality, [pause] the harsh reality that was now his existence....
Hey! I just noticed...congrats to you ..that was your 1000th Post on the forum....
I find the story quite dark, which in all honesty is not my cup of tea.....but yes, It does capture, and one wonders how he became all shackled up......
Ah! Michael - I wouldn't of taken you to be a 'Sunshine & Lollypops' kinda guy - but each to their own and I've achieved what I'm setting out to do - cause you are intrigued and asking questions, which leads me to think the cover is indeed made of 'velcro'...........unfortunately, that is the last of the sneak previews and you'll have to buy my book to find out what the hell has, is and will happen to my man Jake........... thanks for your opinion, it's greatly appreciated e154
As for that Mike Stenson fella, he just deserves a boot in the arse , maybe you could do the honours next time you see him; and yeah - you can tell him it's from me....
How many pages have you written, is it legal in Ireland?
allgood
Pages??? Hah! - my friend I've written chapters................this is a book I'm writting not one of those comics that you are so fond of...............is WHAT legal in Ireland? Writting books or kicking people in the arse
:emot19:
later.....
Later it is...............Be good
So when can we expect your masterpiece, Rhona? Don't forget to send us the tickets to attend the book signing.
Tell you what Carl - I'll hand deliver your copy.........signed and all
ok rhona you cant exactly walk between scotland and ireland but closest points TORR HEAD county ANTRIM 23km from MULL OF KINTYRE SCOTLAND.on a clear day u can see fields in SCOTLAND across the north channel.
Mull of Kintyre..........didn't some-one sing a song about that..........AND you lied to me!!! bet you could swim accross on a good day..........
sorry didnt lie i did read it somewhere but cant find the info at the moment. e154 cheers
mmmmm! A likely story....
Mull of Kintyre - Paul McCartney & Wings
Quote from: Rhona on May 10, 2008, 01:42:07 PM
Tell you what Carl - I'll hand deliver your copy.........signed and all
Thanks Rhona, your kindness abounds you.
@ Carl - my kindness 'abounds' you or maybe it 'astounds' you???
aw rhona doesny love me anymore........
Where's that coming from Chris - you feeling like you need a hug?
Quote from: Rhona on May 16, 2008, 11:03:03 PM
@ Carl - my kindness 'abounds' you or maybe it 'astounds' you???
No, it abounds you. No typo there.
rhona i always need hugs ,,thanks sweetie.
Whoa......hold on there Chris - I was going to organise Koos to give you a hug..........
no no no koos to prickly, yukkie,you much betta girly soft.
Ah but I'd hate to put your pace-maker into overdrive - maybe we can ask Michelle if we can borrow Shadow - sooooo soft
ah i luv doggys........................ so adorable cuddly obedient bring the leash and time for walkies.......... oops strayed off the subject there .......... now where was i??
You were cuddling up to Shadow
oh thats where i was....... shadow still got sweet puppy breathe
That's cause Michelle brushes his teeth twice a day
it has to be maccleans toothpaste [gsk product] or youll be lynched at dawn by the ceo...........
Sensodine for me - also GSK product
So hows the book going Rhona?
Going good now - I set a deadline of the end of the year to finish it - I have the start of it and then bounced into the middle; so I need to join all the various ideas and parts together..........gonna be a good one - even if I do say so myself...........are you a reader?
I'm soooooo tired and I need to be minded......
Hi y'all. What's GSK?
Quote from: Carl Wrbka on June 20, 2008, 05:33:13 AM
Hi y'all. What's GSK?
GEE SOMS KAK?
GEBRUIK SONDER KRAG?
This should be fun!
:emot19:
:emot19: Thanks Michele. Helpful as ever...lol
@ Michelle - behave yourself!!!
@ Carl - GSK; It's the pharmaceutical company where I work - Glaxo Smith Kline
So that's where Bot fighters get the blue pills from...
image06
Do you need some Jnr? :buffo9:
I belive the blue pills he wants are made by Pfizer :emot19:
You are correct there Carl - sounds like a man speaking from experience laughpoint
Hi rhona, young celtic lass, and young carl .............. just dont get what i got .......... then you just shoot powder...lol
love you both........ im in a chirpy mood tonite......... rhona wheres the address to send you those chocolate logs???
Quote from: Rhona on June 20, 2008, 05:10:10 PM
You are correct there Carl - sounds like a man speaking from experience laughpoint
Nope, I still manage to stop rolling out of bed without help from Pfizer... laughpoint back at ya
Thanks for the offer Chris - but I was given the name of a site in the UK that supplies S.African produce and believe it or not but they have those logs on their list......Thank you for the offer.......
@ Carl - congrats
ok rhona luv, but dont fget they r nestle and cadburys"s is still the best choccies by far . we also get imported cad chocs here @spar {dont know about mikes one {hahahehe}] but pretty dear here in gud old cape town.
Do you get such a thing as an imported cad choc? I thought they were made locally, with a glass and a half of local milk :emot19:
Am I right in thinking that Cadbury's is origionally an Irish product? They used to advertise their chocs with a strong Irish theme.
I know you guys were moaning and whinging last night about the slooooooooooooooow pace of the pc - but now it's my turn.........
What the hell is going on - I think a leprechaun is after chewing through the wires 3_8_14 3_8_14 3_8_14
sorriso2 Where's the rolling around in laughter man....or am I just to " happy " to find him.
OK Rhona just imagine a rolling around in laughter man!!!!!!
Is this who you're looking for image201 or maybe this fella image281
What do you call a rolling around in laughter man in a pile of leaves? Russel.
What do you call a girl standing between two goal posts...................Annette